Monday, December 4, 2006

The Smile That Breaks Your Heart

The Smile that Breaks Your Heart


He sits there motionless beside me
I am terrified
I’m too scared to even look at him

I wanted to be alone but fate had him find me
He sits there, not knowing the power he has over me

And then you come onto the scene
Time stops while it waits for me to catch my breath
Does he even notice you?

We instantly become the only two people in the room
Now it is you that terrifies me
I immediately stare at my feet
I cannot look up because I know
Because I know that you will look at him
You will look at him and smile
And I’ll know that I have lost


I don’t know. The concept of this “poem” is to express the pain you experience when you watch the girl of your dreams and she doesn’t even know that you’re alive, but hopefully with a new twist. I’m sure that when I run out of ideas, I’ll resort to talking about that from a normal, more conventional view point. However, I wanted this poem to have a mysterious feel to it. I want the reader to be guessing at what the poem is about til the very end… maybe having the reader reread the ending to get it. I wanted to talk about the fear of watching “the other guy” smile at her and having her smile back at him. I’m not entirely sure I’ve captured the emotions in this work. Oh well, this poem might get a rewrite in the future because I really like the concept.

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